Charlie II

Heya Shadow! I like reading prologues like this because it's actually quite interesting. Rather than having a short chronology of the fantasy world you've created, it's actually about characters and ...

Hey cj2344! First, let me say that this is one of the best shorts that I've read on YWS for some time. You have a clear command of language and ...

Hey dark! I quite enjoyed the Pokémon series when I used to watch it on TV so I thought I'd check your piece out. Imagine my surprise when I find ...

Hey Sololol! It's always strange reviewing lyrics without hearing them sung. The tone and message can be completely different depending on the delivery -- so apologies in advance if I've ...

Hey Danceingtreeelf! This is, as you said in the description, very short. That's an advantage because if makes each individual sentence more important than in a novel, but it does ...

Hey niteowl! The feel of this reminded me a lot of PhD Comics which I'm sure you'll appreciate. That is, if you don't already know about it. I think the ...

Hey jaxalexander, You've already got a decent and thorough review from magpie94 but I'll see if I can give you my impression of the poem as well. Firstly, you've got ...

Heya dizzy, This piece made me laugh such a lot the first time I read it. I like the twist on the normal scary story -- this time it's the ...

Hey Angelorchid, I'd like to talk a bit about story-psychology with regard to this piece. You write very well in that the way you form sentences and put words together ...

Hey cm57105! I really enjoyed reading this. It's a little short in length, but you successfully cover the important points of a good beginning. You've introduced a protagonist and his ...

Stori, my good man! I haven't played Skyrim, unfortunately, but I have played Oblivion and so I know a little about the Elder Scrolls games. It seems like you can ...

Hey jon7670, I suppose I'm always drawn to pieces that have been tagged as humour because I like to see how the author has done it. For the most part ...

Oh Stella! :D I read this (and the first part) a little while ago but I wrote some notes down so I think I should let you know even if ...

Hey misstoria :) I really enjoyed this poem -- it looks like niteowl has helped with some of the fine details so I'll look at the poem as a whole. ...

Hey kimmybee! I giggled quite a bit at this scene. :P I think you've done well, writing this. The humour is light and not too in-your-face and the characterisation is ...